[Comedy]
Author: Recamen
Description: After a night in which she may have had one too many drinks, Rarity wakes up to find that everything below her head is missing. See her publicly declare herself deceased, be the general drama queen she is, and put together the pieces of a puzzling evening.
Rarity's Mid-Death Crisis
Additional Tags: Short, Slice-of-life, Rarity, Berry Punch, Octavia
I honestly enjoyed this fic. Everypony was pretty in-character and the story was almost like I'd expect an episode to turn out (apart from the alcohol ;D ). You touched on a very interesting topic, namely the "What would ponies say at my funeral" issue, which is quite potent; you handled it well, if a little on the rushed side.
ReplyDeleteOne thing that might end up being of concern (although I don't mind it so much) is the informality of the beginning parts. Directly speaking to the audience as the narrator can be a real turn-off to some people if you're not going for such an attitude throughout the whole story.
Oh! I didn't realize this got posted. Thanks for reviewing! I tried sending this off to EqD... around this time, I think? I've changed a fair bit since then - in fact, I changed quite a bit since later that day. They suggested at the time that I revise some of the more drunken language (haven't done yet, eventually saw what they were talking about), expand the Octavia and Fancypants bits (done that somewhat, though due to word limits Derpy Hooves is out for now, could return later), and remove all the "..." bits at the start (done that).
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